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Wordy Expressions

A redundant expression says the same thing twice, and doubletalk avoids getting directly to the point. Both are examples of wordy expressions. Other such expressions use more than one word when one will do—for example, in the vicinity of instead of near—not necessarily to mislead or cover up but because a writer is careless or afraid to write simply.

Redundant expressions

In writing, redundancy means conveying the same meaning twice. Like other kinds of wordiness, redundancy makes writing fat. Sometimes people use redundant expressions because they don't recognize the precise definition of a word. For example, close proximity is redundant because proximity by itself means nearness. Can there be any other kind of nearness than close nearness? Other times people fall into redundant expressions because they don't pay enough attention to what they are writing—for example, small in size, few in number, or red in color.

Selected list of redundant expressions

Look for redundant expressions and you'll find them easily. 1 and 2 present a short list to get you started. When you write, check your drafts to make sure you are getting the -full value of the words you choose and not adding unnecessary ones.

TABLE 1 Adjectives, Adverbs, Nouns

advance warning

free gift

same identical

advance planning

fundamental basis

sad lament

close intimates

future ahead

sudden impulse

close scrutiny

human artifact

true fact

completely unanimous

Jewish rabbi

tuna fish

consensus of opinion

more better

two opposites

currently at this time

new innovation

unexpected surprise

empty void

now pending

unimportant triviality

end result

past history

wealthy millionaire

exact same

present incumbent

yearly annual

famous celebrity

rejected outcast


TABLE 2 Adjectives, Adverbs, Nouns

advance forward

leave from

retreat back

continue on

lower down

return back

cooperate together

proceed forward

share in common

enter into (buildings)

raise up

share together

join together

retract back

There is, there are, it is expressions

Many wordy expressions make use of there is, there are, or it is. These constructions can often be eliminated.

  • There is a famous author who lives on my block.

  • BETTER   A famous author lives on my block.

  • There are many people who like television.

  • BETTER   Many people like television.

  • There are some animals that thrive in arctic temperatures.

  • BETTER   Some animals thrive in arctic temperatures.

  • It is rarely the case that people refuse to help.

  • BETTER   People rarely refuse to help.

  • It is a fact that most of us like to be praised.

  • BETTER   Most of us like to be praised.

Overused intensifiers

Intensifiers are words intended to add force to what you say: very, absolutely, positively, really, quite, and so on. Sometimes you need them, but more often you can prune them without it affecting your tone or meaning. Review the following examples.

  • Roosevelt, certainly a quite active president, refused to give in to his handicap.

  • BETTER   Roosevelt, an active president, refused to give in to his handicap.

  • She positively expects to win this election.

  • BETTER   She expects to win this election.

  • The results were very surprising.

  • BETTER   The results were surprising.

Selected list of wordy expressions

Thousands of wordy expressions exist, and new ones are created every day. Following are a few examples. Check your writing for similar roundabout ways of saying something.

  • after the conclusion of = after: After the concert we left NOT After the conclusion of the concert we left.

  • all of = all: All the boys came NOT All of the boys came.

  • any and all = any or all: We appreciate any suggestions NOT We appreciate any and all suggestions.

  • at the present moment, at this point in time = now: We are looking for a solution now NOT We are looking for a solution at the present moment.

  • by means of = by: He came by car NOT He came by means of a car.

  • due to the fact that = because: Because he called, we waited NOT Due to the fact that he called, we waited.

  • for the purpose of (+ gerund) = to: The meeting is to discuss plans NOT The meeting is for the purpose of discussing plans.

  • for the simple reason that = because: She won because she was best NOT She won for the simple reason that she was best.

  • he is a man who is = he is: He is admired NOT He is a man who is admired.

  • In a place where = where: They lived where no trees grew NOT They lived in a place where no trees grew.

  • in connection with = about: He telephoned about the rally NOT He telephoned in connection with the rally.

  • in order to = to: He said this to help you NOT He said this in order to help you.

  • in spite of the fact that = although or though: Although she agreed, she was sad NOT In spite of the fact that she agreed, she was sad.

  • in the near future = soon: We'll see you soon NOT We'll see you in the near future.

  • in view of the fact that = because: Because she helped us, we won NOT In view of the fact that she helped us, we won.

  • is located in = is in: Ventura County is in California NOT Ventura County is located in California.

  • it often happens that = often: Often he is invited to attend NOT It often happens that he is invited to attend.

  • on the part of = by: A suggestion by the consultant helped NOT A suggestion on the part of the consultant helped.

  • owing to the fact that = because: Because he was here, we stayed NOT Owing to the fact that he was here, we stayed.

  • practice in the field of = practice: She practices medicine NOT She practices in the field of medicine.

  • rarely ever = rarely: She rarely speaks to a large group NOT She rarely ever speaks to a large group.

  • the fact is that, the truth is that = often omit altogether: You are the right candidate NOT The fact is that you are the right candidate.

  • which was when = when: I spoke with him yesterday when he called NOT I spoke with him yesterday, which was when he called.

  • with the exception of = except: I like all sports except boxing NOT I like all sports with the exception of boxing.

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